thank you for trusting me to organize this debate.now, except for the specific topic, everything is ready.（不太适宜用于书信表达，有点口语化）and thus, i am writing tooffer some advice on it.list the details of the debate on the theme of city traffic.（不是你给别人提供建议，本来就是你要来组织的呀，表达要改）
i propose that “which is the cause of traffic jam, inadequate public transport facilities or poor management”（哪有这么长的topic呀，改为the cause of traffic jam，具体内容后面去介绍）be our debate topic.this topic is debatable in that it contains two major causes of traffic jam.（这句话也要再斟酌，这个话题之所以有讨论性，是因为它涉及了traffic jam，而不是因为这个话题包含了两个原因，逻辑明显不对）in addition, it is related to the hot issues, like shared bike and public transport,which are concerned by many people.（这句话和前面的hot issues就是一个意思）finally, thiskind oftopic involving city planning has relations to the curriculumtaughtlearned（因为你是从学生的角度出发，所以用learned而不是taught）this semester.这句也可以换一种说法，可以说和这些学生的专业相关i think that it is helpful for students to deepen thier understandingsof the curriculum.（上一句提到的，这一句就可以省略，不会影响意思）
this debate will be held at the first conference hall from 7:00 p.m. to 9:00 p.m. on saturday.（这句不能放在最后一段，这个也属于具体的安排，放在第二段最后一句）thank you for your trust!这样的结尾会好一些：thank you for your reading and patience. i hope that you will find these details useful.
内容逻辑（3分）：1.5
语言表达（3分）: 1.5
语法基础（3分）：2.5
格式（1分）：1
总分（10分）：6.5
1、内容上，解释为什么选择这个话题用了太多的篇幅，最多两句话就可以解释完了，比如we would like to make” the cause of traffic jam” the name of the debate,because traffic jam becomes a growing worry for the most urban residents.；时间地点的安排是题目中“arrangements”的内容，要放在第二段。
2、语言表达上，需要更贴切书信语言的表达一些，而且开头和结尾的意思可以稍微改动一下，或者换个词、换个表达方式都行，不要完全一样，都用了thank you for trusting me，很明显最后一段应该征询一下对方的意见。
3.语法方面还是处理得不错的，继续保持就好。
i am writing this letter to invite you to participate（缺少介词in，短语：participate in sth）an online meeting. here are some details about the meeting as follow.（here are和as follow一般不一起使用哈，两者都是介绍下面内容的意思，二选一就可以：here are some details… 或是some details are as follows.）
to start with, the online meeting will be hold(held)at 3 pm on (on删掉哈，一般星期前面有修饰词的话是不加介词的)next saturday, and i will sent （语法错误：这里用动词原形send）you the link to enter the meeting if you could take my invite (语法错误：这里应该用名词invitation，另外“接受邀请”的英语表达是accept one’s invitation). in addition, the aims of the meeting are going to enhance relations between international students and native students. what is more, there are some entertainments in the activity, including talking shows(脱口秀：talk show)and playing games.
i would be appreciate it (it would be appreciated it …)if you could take my invitation into consideration (建议改成attend the meeting and share your opinions更好哈). and i am looking forward to your favorable reply.
内容逻辑(3分): 2.5
语言表达(3分): 1.5
语法基础(3分):1.5
格式(1分):1
总分: 6.5分
评语：
内容上看没啥大问题哈，篇章布局很清晰，第一段可以仔加一句自我介绍，一般是三句比较好哈。
语言上语法错误还是稍有点多，自己写完有时间的话还是要检查一下哈；表达上的话尽量避免搭配错误和重复一种表达，自己在考前有时间的话最好再复习一遍大纲单词或是自己积累的表达哈。
继续加油！
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